Well, it's definitely been a while since my last post. I've been distracted of late. Nevertheless! I bring something extra special today!
So a few months ago (near the end of 2013), some roommates, friends and I had a boring night, and we decided to do what we called "flash fiction". This basically meant that we would write a work of fiction with a certain time or length restraint on ourselves. For some, we had to sum up a fictional situation in just three sentences. In others, we had ten minutes to write our story.
At any rate, I was not very good at it. I tended to take too long. When I decide to write, I can't really just sum up a story; my natural tendency is to be as detailed as I can. This was my bane for the first flash fiction we did. The time limit was 20 minutes; I took the entire time writing three purely descriptive paragraphs. But I liked what I had written, and so I endeavored over the next few months to finish writing what I had started.
Today, friends, you get the finished product.
Enjoy.
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THE FAR END
A Short story by
Caleb Sorensen
For my
siblings: Craben, Caridad and G. It’s your fault I like writing.
The rain was coming down in
droves. The clouds were menacingly dark,
their edges hazy as they pummeled the earth below with drops the size of
bullets. The asphalt shimmered under a
film of water, appearing to all the world like a great, black river. The shops lining the sides of the street were
closing down, and people rushed from their doors; some stopped to open
umbrellas, others pulled their raincoats tighter around them. The weather had held this pattern all day,
and now it was time for the working man to make his way home.
One of these was a young man, no
older than 21. He wore a too-large dress
shirt, a slightly faded navy-blue coat, and a striped, brown tie with the knot
loosened from around his neck. His
shoulder-length brown hair hung down in his face, thoroughly soaked by the
downpour falling on the streets of St. Abagail’s. He jogged at a lively pace through the rain
toward the nearby subway station.
Quickly descending the stairs, he shook his hair out, grateful to be out
of the cold rain, if only for a few minutes.
He made his way more deliberately over to the southbound platform.
The Red Street station was much the
same today as it ever was (and he frequented this particular stop
regularly). It was a smaller station,
not as large as Main Street, or Blackman’s Crossing; but despite this it was
nonetheless longer than its wider neighbors.
Graffiti covered the walls, plastering them in reds, greens, and
oranges, depicting unusual names and the occasional vulgar image. The station was not particularly well-kept;
litter was strewn about, especially near the corners and on the tracks
themselves. Red Street station never
suffered from heavy traffic, and thus the maintenance crew apparently did not
find it expedient to pick up the garbage left by those who boarded there.
The station had only two platforms:
one that ran south, and one that ran north.
The total length of the platforms was, as previously observed,
impressive for so small a stop; it ran nearly 400 feet from one end to the other. The stairs from the street were situated at
the north end; the south end of the platform, 400 feet away, was always
obscured, as the lights about halfway down had long since ceased to function. It left a dark curtain that shrouded what lay
at the far end of the platform.
The young man approached his
platform, and checked his watch. He
sighed and rolled his eyes; his train had departed 3 minutes ago, and wouldn’t
come again for another half hour.
Briefly he considered walking home instead, but quickly dismissed the
idea; it would take longer to walk home than it would to wait for the next
train, and besides, he was exhausted after what had seemed a never-ending day
of school and work. Resigning himself to
the wait, he stood alone on the platform.
A few moments passed, and boredom
began to set in, slowly gnawing away at his patience. The young man began to look at the same
surroundings he had seen a million times, all the while knowing that his search
would yield nothing new. His eyes
wandered, eventually settling on the deep darkness toward the south end of the
platform. He had only once ventured into
those shadows. It had been a day like
this, cold and overcast; that day he had also been alone, and his curiosity had
overpowered him. He had only wanted to
see what lay in the blackness, to find something new in an environment he knew thoroughly. But there is something foreboding about the
dark; it stirs fear and alarm in the heart, especially when that dark is
unfamiliar. And so it was with his single
foray into that darkness; he had felt the hair rise on the back of his neck,
and the shadows had turned from intriguing mysteries to sinister fiends
flitting just out view, flanking him, pressing in around him on every side.
The young man shifted
uncomfortably. It was silly, but the
memory was an unsettling one; he wasn’t afraid to board at Red Street station,
but he preferred to stay on the comfortable, dimly lit side of the
platform. He glanced at his watch again
– 21 minutes. He cast one last uneasy
glance at the far end of the platform.
He was no longer alone.
He blinked hard, did a double
take. He couldn’t explain how he knew –
he could barely see into the veil of blackness obscuring the far side – but he
perceived that someone was standing on the south end of the platform now. He shook his head, looked back toward the
stairs, and slowly turned toward the south end again; silently, he prayed that
it had only been a trick of the mind, that stirring up that old memory had
given his discomfort temporary form. He
was disappointed. The far end was still
occupied, and the being present there was no longer still. Squinting to see more clearly, the young
man’s head jerked back toward the tracks before him with a start, as he saw two
pinpricks of light; the one on the far side had caught him staring, had turned
to look at him.
He fought to keep down a growing
feeling of dread. It was nothing, he
thought. It was just someone else
waiting for the train.
But wait all the way over there? Maybe he got bored with the waiting.
Why not stay where it was lit? Maybe the light hurt his eyes.
But why hadn’t I noticed him before? He got here before you, naturally.
But he didn’t board the train you just missed? ...
He
had no reply for this last thought. His
unease was growing, even as he fought to keep it suppressed. Was the other still watching, peering at him
through the shadows? He did not dare to
look again, but he knew he must chance it.
Warily, moving his head as little as
possible, the young man looked up again.
The pinpricks of light were still there, the stranger’s eyes reflecting
the dim light on his end of the platform. He looked down at the ground
again. The one in the dark had not
stopped watching him. The young man
could almost feel eyes searching him, probing him. He felt a chill run down his spine, and he
shuddered involuntarily. He took a few
deep breaths, trying desperately to calm himself. After a moment, he felt himself calming down
a bit. He had overreacted. It was nothing; the stranger on the far side
had simply wanted a good look at him. He
felt foolish for having let his irrational thoughts get the better of him.
Tap…tap…tap…
The dull sound instantly ripped the
young man from his peaceful reverie. His
breath caught in his throat; his eyes automatically darted toward the
darkness. Those eyes, reflecting the dim
light, were still there… but were they closer?
He couldn’t really tell; at best it had been only a few steps, but the
sound was unmistakable: footfalls on concrete.
The one on the far side was approaching.
His discomfort surged up from his
gut again, this time filling him completely.
He had to keep calm. He tried the
slow breathing again, but each breath sounded shallow and weak. It only made him more uneasy; he did not like
the feeling of lacking control over something as simple as breathing.
Tap…tap…tap…tap…tap…
Footfalls again. As the young man watched, there was no doubt
anymore: the tiny dots of illumination
swayed slightly in the blackness, ever fixed upon him. The other was moving slowly, deliberately, as
if there was all the time in the world.
The young man tried to swallow the growing lump in his throat; his
breathing was becoming too loud, far too loud.
Now he wanted only to look away, to forget the approach of the one in
the dark. He hastily twisted his wrist
out of his coat sleeve, glancing down at the face of his watch. 8 minutes ‘til the train came.
Tap…tap…tap…tap…
This time he
twisted his whole head toward the sound.
The other’s pace had not quickened at all. Yet still he drew closer. Why? Why this deliberate, gut-wrenching
approach? Did the one in the dark, the
one with the dimly lit eyes know that each ponderous step made the young man
choke on his own breath? Could the one
from the far end sense his dread, feel it radiate from him like heat from a
furnace? With each consistent step, the
young man felt his heart rate spiking.
He had to leave, he had to go.
But he felt his courage slip away from him; his feet stood fixed like
nails to the ground. His own legs would
not rescue him.
And still the tapping continued.
The young man’s mind was frantic
now. Blasted train! Where was it?! His eyes tore to his watch again, and again. Had the hands stopped moving? How could there still be 3 minutes? He knew – the horrid pit in his stomach told
him so – that that was time he did not have.
Not enough…not enough to evade the terrible, unfaltering approach of the
one from the far side!
He had not forgotten the footfalls,
for now each step echoed in his ears like tolling iron bells, so loud to him
that not even his ragged breathing could drown them out. He could see the other taking a form more
definite, more substantial. Still only a
being of shadows, but a being nonetheless.
The young man finally managed a staggering step backward, toward the
stairs. The illuminated eyes, still
fixed on him! Too close now! Those lights!
Those lights! ...
And then they were there,
approaching on a sound like rushing air: headlights, the bright eyes of the
train. Slowly the doors slid open;
nobody exited. The young man, as if
released from some terrible grip, leaped through the nearest portal. Now he was under bright lights. Now he was surrounded by people; people he did
not know, but somehow, they were not strangers to him. A brief moment passed, and then the doors
slid closed again, shielding him from the platform, boxing him safely inside
the passenger car. Taking a few deep
breaths, he pulled himself over to a nearby vacant seat, against the wall that
faced the platform he had just left behind.
Resignedly, wearily, he threw himself into it.
He only vaguely registered his
nearest neighbor’s voice, inquiring if he was feeling well. The train began to move, slowly at first, but
gradually picked up speed. The young man
gave one last hesitant glance out the window at the Red Street station. Were those pinpricks of light he perceived in
the dark of the southbound platform, just beyond the reach of the dim lights?
He exhaled deeply. No matter.
It was behind him now.
Still, as he sat slumped in his
chair, head back, eyes fixed on the ceiling now, he couldn’t help but think
that maybe walking home from Red Street from now on would do him some good.
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